1st T's Correction of Report 1 by M.Markovic

Dear Sir,
The purpose of this report is to talk about criminals in our town, some reasons for doing it and how we can make the number of crimes smaller.
In my opinion, most people who are breaking law are under the influence of taking drugs because if they don’t have money for it they are mugging or even worst - burgle houses. On the other hand, alcohol is very big problem. Drunken people can be very violence and can hurt other people, too.
I think that you should put police officers on many locations in town so that our society becomes safer for leaving. Maybe today many people don’t have much money for video cameras, but i think that we can put cameras in bigger shops or in some places where younger people go in the evening so that they can’t use alcohol or drugs.
On the end, I hope you would do at least something that would minimize violence in our town.

Report by M.Markovic

Dear Sir,
The purpose of this report is to talk about criminals in our town, some reasons for doing it and how we can make the number of crimes smaller.
In my opinion, most people who are breaking law are under the influence of taking drugs because if they don’t have money for it they are mugging or even worst-burgle houses. On the other hand alcohol is very big problem. Drunken people can be very violence and can hurt other people, too.
I think that you should put police officers on many locations in town so that our society becomes safer for leaving. Maybe today many people don’t have much money for video cameras, but i think that we can put cameras in bigger shops or in some places where younger people go in the evening so that they can’t use alcohol or drugs.
On the end, I hope you would do at least something that would minimize violence in our town.

1st T's Correction of A STORY by M.Savić

Milos, you have to follow the instructions - your story must end with the sentence:
When John got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that day.
Please correct the highlighted text sections.

John was a thirty – old taxi driver. He was driving home his last customer for that day. Looking at his taximeter, he whispered to himself: ’After my job, I will have a nice nap’.
After some time, John stopped and his customer got out of the car. ’That will be $45,’ John told. Then, customer gave him $50 and suddenly dissapeared. John was unsuccessfully calling for him to get back and take his excange, but there was no response.
’What a brainless person,’ tought John. During his home drive he saw a lottery shop and stopped to buy a strach money card, from the forgoten ehcange money.
Minutes later, he got home. He sat at his sofa and turned on the tv. Than, he took the card and strached it. It was like a cold shower. He won $500.000. He could not belive he had such luck.
But, was it a reward for his hard work?

A STORY by M.Savić

John was a thirty – old taxi driver. He was driving home his last customer for that day. Looking at his taximeter, he whispered to himself: «After my job, I will have a nice nap».
After some time, John stopped and his customer got out of the car. «That will be $45», John told. Then, customer gave him $50 and suddenly dissapeared. John was unsuccessfully calling for him to get back and take his excange, but there was no response.
«What a brainless person», tought John. During his home drive he saw a lottery shop and stopped to buy a strach money card, from the forgoten ehcange money.
Minutes later, he got home. He sat at his sofa and turned on the tv. Than, he took the card and strached it.It was like a cold shower. He won $500.000. He could not belive he had such luck.
But, was it a reward for his hard work?

Final T's Correction of Story by S.Radovanović

Stranger than Fiction

That day John was working in the second shift. While he was preparing to go to work the phone rang. He picked it up and answered: ”Hello!” There was no answer. His wife asked “Who was that?” and he said that it was probably a mistake, so he went to his factory. John was working in a car factory. He had a lot of work to do because he had just signed a new deal with “Porsche” manager. While he was working the phone rang, and again there was no answer. John had more important business to do, so he didn’t pay much attention to the calls.

It was the end of his shift, so he wanted to go home. While approaching his car he realized he had forgotten his keys, so he got back to the office. He took the keys and went outside the factory. While he was walking he heard a big “boom” at the parking place. His car exploded right in front of his eyes. He was terrified. He didn’t know what to do.

After quite a long time he took a taxi and went home. John explained everything to his wife and they called the police.This will change his life for sure. When he got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that night.

S'S Correction of Story (Stefan Radovanovic)

Stranger than FictionThat day John was working in the second shift. While he was preparing to go to work the phone rang. He picked it up and answered: ”Hello!” There was no answer. His wife asked “Who was that?” and he said that it was probably mistake, so he went to his factory. John was working in the car factory. He had a lot of work to do because he had just signed a new deal with “Porsche” manager. While working the phone rang and again, there was no answer. John had more important business to do, so he didn’t pay much attention to the calls.
It was the end of his shift, so he wanted to go home. While approaching to his car he realized he had forgotten his keys, so he got back to the office. He took the keys and went outside of the factory. While he was walking he heard a big “boom” at the parking place. His car exploded right in front of his eyes. He was terrified. He didn’t know what to do.
After a quite long time he took a taxi and went home. John explained everything to his wife and they called the police.This will change his life for shure. When he got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that night.

1st T's Correction of Story by P.Milicevic

Pedja, this is completely different from what is required in the task. First, FCE limit is 180 words, and your composition has 617! The task should be predominantly written in narrative tenses (past simple, past perfect, past continuos). Please read the instructions in your textbook. There are also some inconsistencies - if he is the owner of the shop, why would he call a boss for the code? How could the girl inside the safe know the code?

John is a man who owns a jewelry shop in New York. He had lots of customers every day who were interested for gold, silver and many other things. One day his collogue Maria Peterson, who he has not seen before, wanted to come to pick up some documents. That day he had a customer with her daughter wanted to buy something. John wanted to show the woman some jewelry from the huge safe witch was unlocked. He took the jewels and left the safe, but he didn’t saw the little girl who went inside. When she was looking around the doors suddenly closed. John and the mother of the girl were busy with choosing rings, so they haven’t seen what happened. When the mother wanted to ask her daughter witch one does she likes, but behind her was nobody. Although she called her there was no answer. John began to search for the little girl Natalie. When he passed the safe he heard someone was shouting “help”. He knew that it came from the safe .He wanted to opened it but it was locked. “Open the safe” the mother shouted
“I cant, Its locked!”
“Use the code to open it”
“The boss has it I just have to call him.”
John phoned him but he wasn’t available
“What shall we do now?” she asked,
“Ill call the locksmith to break in”
15 minutes latter he came. When he saw the safe he said
“This is a very strong safe ,ill need 2 hours to get it opened, and the girl has only air for maybe 30 minutes”
At that time Maria Peterson came. She had seen that something isn’t all right.
“Can I have a try?” she asked,
“OK, have a try.” The locksmith answered.
She sat beside the safe and said
“Natalie, we are going to play a little game now.”
“Why?” she asked
“Trust me, just don’t panic”
“OK.”
“Now tell me left or right?”
“Left”
“Now tell me a number between 1 and 100!”
“36.”
“Again left or right?”
“Right!”
“Again one number!
“87”
“Again left or right?”
“Right!”
“Now a number!”
“17”
“OK, this is the last time, left or right”
“Right!”
“And now, tell me the last number!”
“I cant do this no more, Im to tired.
Natalie could not breath normally, the air was getting thinner and thinner.
“Natalie, just one more number, please!”
“…1”
After that in the safe was very still. She must have lost her consciousness.
Than the women started to tipe the positions and numbers on the safe.
“Left 36,right 87,right 17 right 1” she said while she was tipping. She pulled the door handle, but the safe won’t open.
She couldn’t believe it, she was shore that it would be the right combination. She started thinking, and than said
“It wasn’t right 1, It should be left 1!”
So again she started tipping, and when she tipped the last number, there was a “click” sound. When she pulled the door handle the safe had opened itself. The mother took her out of It and after one minute she had her consciousness back. The locksmith told them that if she would have stayed in there any minute longer she would be there. Everyone was busy with the child, so nobody had seen that Maria had left. A half hour later a women came in the shop and asked
“Hello, Im Maria Peterson and I came here to pick up the documents.”
John couldn’t believe what he had heard. If this is Maria, who was the woman who saved the girl. When John got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that day.

Story: John is a man who owns a jewelry shop in New York by P.Milicevic

John is a man who owns a jewelry shop in New York. He had lots of customers every day who were interested for gold, silver and many other things. One day his collogue Maria Peterson, who he has not seen before, wanted to come to pick up some documents. That day he had a customer with her daughter wanted to buy something. John wanted to show the woman some jewelry from the huge safe witch was unlocked. He took the jewels and left the safe, but he didn’t saw the little girl who went inside. When she was looking around the doors suddenly closed. John and the mother of the girl were busy with choosing rings, so they haven’t seen what happened. When the mother wanted to ask her daughter witch one does she likes, but behind her was nobody. Although she called her there was no answer. John began to search for the little girl Natalie. When he passed the safe he heard someone was shouting “help”. He knew that it came from the safe .He wanted to opened it but it was locked. “Open the safe” the mother shouted
“I cant, Its locked!”
“Use the code to open it”
“The boss has it I just have to call him.”
John phoned him but he wasn’t available
“What shall we do now?” she asked,
“Ill call the locksmith to break in”
15 minutes latter he came. When he saw the safe he said
“This is a very strong safe ,ill need 2 hours to get it opened, and the girl has only air for maybe 30 minutes”
At that time Maria Peterson came. She had seen that something isn’t all right.
“Can I have a try?” she asked,
“OK, have a try.” The locksmith answered.
She sat beside the safe and said
“Natalie, we are going to play a little game now.”
“Why?” she asked
“Trust me, just don’t panic”
“OK.”
“Now tell me left or right?”
“Left”
“Now tell me a number between 1 and 100!”
“36.”
“Again left or right?”
“Right!”
“Again one number!
“87”
“Again left or right?”
“Right!”
“Now a number!”
“17”
“OK, this is the last time, left or right”
“Right!”
“And now, tell me the last number!”
“I cant do this no more, Im to tired.
Natalie could not breath normally, the air was getting thinner and thinner.
“Natalie, just one more number, please!”
“…1”
After that in the safe was very still. She must have lost her consciousness.
Than the women started to tipe the positions and numbers on the safe.
“Left 36,right 87,right 17 right 1” she said while she was tipping. She pulled the door handle, but the safe won’t open.
She couldn’t believe it, she was shore that it would be the right combination. She started thinking, and than said
“It wasn’t right 1, It should be left 1!”
So again she started tipping, and when she tipped the last number, there was a “click” sound. When she pulled the door handle the safe had opened itself. The mother took her out of It and after one minute she had her consciousness back. The locksmith told them that if she would have stayed in there any minute longer she would be there. Everyone was busy with the child, so nobody had seen that Maria had left. A half hour later a women came in the shop and asked
“Hello, Im Maria Peterson and I came here to pick up the documents.”
John couldn’t believe what he had heard. If this is Maria, who was the woman who saved the girl. When John got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that day.

1st T's Correction of Story by S.Radovanovic

Stefan, you have exceeded the word limit by 100 words. Use paragraphing to organise your ideas in a better way. Your climax seems to be a little bit unusual. Was the explosive device set to go off at a certain time? Why would it be before the end of work time?

Stranger than Fiction

That day John was working in the second shift because he was too tired after yesterday’s meeting. While he was preparing to go to work the phone rang. He picked it up and answered: ”Hello!” There was no answer. His wife asked who was that and he said that it was probably mistake, so he went to his factory.
John was working in the factory, which produces cars – a new model. He had a lot of work to do because he had just signed a new deal with “Porsche” manager. He was very nervous that day like something bad was going to happen. Than the phone rang and again, there was no answer. John had more important business to do, so he didn’t pay much attention to the calls.
It was 9:45 pm and John was sitting in his office. The end of his shift was at 11 pm but he wanted to go a little bit earlier, so he went out of the factory. While he was approaching his car he realized he had forgotten his keys and a briefcase, so he got back to the office. He took the briefcase and went down to the exit. While he was closing the exit door he heard a big “boom” at the parking place. His car exploded right in front of his eyes. He was terrified. He didn’t know what to do.
After a quite long time he took a taxi and went home. John explained everything to his wife and they called the police.
This will certainly change his life. When he got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that night.

Story: Stranger than Fiction by S. Radovanovic

Stranger than Fiction

That day John was working in the second shift because he was too tired after yesterday’s meeting. While he was preparing to go to work the phone rang. He picked it up and answered: ”Hello!” There was no answer. His wife asked who was that and he said that it was probably mistake, so he went to his factory.
John was working in the factory, which produces cars – a new model. He had a lot of work to do because he had just signed a new deal with “Porsche” manager. He was very nervous that day like something bad was going to happen. Than the phone rang and again, there was no answer. John had more important business to do, so he didn’t pay much attention to the calls.
It was 9:45 pm and John was sitting in his office. The end of his shift was at 11 pm but he wanted to go a little bit earlier, so he went out of the factory. While he was approaching his car he realized he had forgotten his keys and a briefcase, so he got back to the office. He took the briefcase and went down to the exit. While he was closing the exit door he heard a big “boom” at the parking place. His car exploded right in front of his eyes. He was terrified. He didn’t know what to do.
After a quite long time he took a taxi and went home. John explained everything to his wife and they called the police.
This will certainly change his life. When he got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that night.

1st T's Correction of Story by K.Vicentijevic

Kaca, this is much too long for the word limit of 120-180 words.

Stranger than Fiction

John is a defense lawyer and he has his own firm. Last Thursday he experienced the strangest event in his life.
He was going to work by car and he was in a good mood. On his way to work he was thinking about a meeting with his new client Mark, a doctor who had been accused of killing a woman, and he claimed that he was innocent. Moreover, he had had an alibi when he had been inspected, so everyone had belived in his innocence. What was interesting, head of the killed woman had never been found. So, John didn’t expect anything stange to happen that day.
When John got at the firm, Mark had already arrived and he had been waiting for John for over an hour. John invited him to his office, so that they could talk in peace. After they agreed about everything that Mark should say in the court, Mark had to sign some papers so that John was sure that he would get paid. When he (Mark) opened his doctor bag, he could see the head of the woman in the bag!! John couldn’t belive what he had seen. Of course, he invited the police immediately.
Police came in five minutes and arrested Mark, who still claimed that he was innocent and that someone was doing that so that he would end up in the prison. John, as his lawyer, had to come on the preliminary hearing. He was confused, he didn’t know what to think. He was Mark’s lawyer and he didn’t have any choice- he had to represent him.
On the hearing, the judge said that no bail was available, and he determined the date of the trial.
John went home, and told his to his girlfriend what had happened to him. She was amazed. When John got into bed that night, he could hardly belive what had happened that day.

Story: Stranger Than Fiction by K.Vicentijevic

John is a defense lawyer and he has his own firm. Last Thursday he experienced the strangest event in his life.
He was going to work by car and he was in a good mood. On his way to work he was thinking about a meeting with his new client Mark, a doctor who had been accused of killing a woman, and he claimed that he was innocent. Moreover, he had had an alibi when he had been inspected, so everyone had belived in his innocence. What was interesting, head of the killed woman had never been found. So, John didn’t expect anything stange to happen that day.
When John got at the firm, Mark had already arrived and he had been waiting for John for over an hour. John invited him to his office, so that they could talk in peace. After they agreed about everything that Mark should say in the court, Mark had to sign some papers so that John was sure that he would get paid. When he (Mark) opened his doctor bag, he could see the head of the woman in the bag!! John couldn’t belive what he had seen. Of course, he invited the police immediately.
Police came in five minutes and arrested Mark, who still claimed that he was innocent and that someone was doing that so that he would end up in the prison. John, as his lawyer, had to come on the preliminary hearing. He was confused, he didn’t know what to think. He was Mark’s lawyer and he didn’t have any choice- he had to represent him.
On the hearing, the judge said that no bail was available, and he determined the date of the trial.
John went home, and told his to his girlfriend what had happened to him. She was amazed. When John got into bed that night, he could hardly belive what had happened that day.

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter by K.Vicentijevic

Dear Velja,

In your last letter you said that you would like me to write you about an important family celebration from my childhood. I’ve decided to tell you something about my first New Year’s Eve with my friends. It wasn’t exactly with my family, but they had a big role in what happened to me.
It was very difficult to convince my parents to let me go to the Art hall with my friends, because they were afraid that something bad could happen to me. But in the end, they couldn’t resist my friend’s parents’ presure and they let me go.
When we got to the Art hall, at about 10 p.m, there were only ten people in the room. At first we thought that more people were about to arrive. An old-style band started playing and it was really boring. As time passed, we realised that our first New Years Eve was a disaster.
After that, we decided to go outside, and to be at the City square at 12 p.m. On our way to the City square, we met my parents and we told them what had happened. At first they laughed at us and then they told me to invite my friends to my house so that we coud have fun at the end of the night.
I did what they told me, and we had a really great time. I mean, in the end it wasn’t that bad. I hope that in the future I won’t be this “lucky”.
Looking forward to hearing from you,
Katarina

Final T's Correction of Story 1 by K.Mijatovic

Nothing was ever the same again after that morning when the letter arrived. I remember that I woke up very early because I couldn’t sleep well, so I went to the living-room and turned the TV on. I was channel-hopping when suddenly I heard the door bell.
It was the postman. I was surprised to see him so early in the morning. He gave me a letter and told me to sign for it. When I opened it I saw a lottery ticket. I thought that the postman had made a mistake because we had not played lottery for years. Then I noticed that the ticket had seven points and on the back it was written: „You are the lucky winner, please go and collect your money.“
I gave the ticket to my parents who told me they had bought the ticket to bring me luck and to mark their 20th wedding anniversary. We were anxious about collecting the money but there were no problems. Since then we all believe in miracles because we saw they are possible.

Final T's Correction of Formal Letter 1 by K.Mijatovic

Dear Mrs Malone,

I have seen your advertisement in a magazine and I wanted to ask you to give me some details. I hope that you will think that I am the right person to help you.
I wonder if you could tell me what kind of help you exactly need. I have experience in working with children because I have a younger sister and I spend a lot of time playing with her.Furthermore, I think you should tell me how old your children are so that I could cooperate better with them. I am also interested in the date of your holiday and how many hours a day I will spend with your children. I would also be grateful if you could inform me about my pay.
I think my English is pretty good because I have studied it for nine years, so there will not be any difficulties in our communication. My wish to improve speaking skills will make it even easier.
I look forward to your reply.


Yours sincerely,
Kristina Mijatovic

Final T's Correction of Formal Letter 1 by K.Krsmanovic

Dear Mr. Malone,

I read your advertisement for work at a camp for children and I would like to apply for a job there, because I think that I can improve my English by working there.
I have studied English for 8 years in a private school and I think that I have very good knowledge of it, so I can work at your camp. Also, I have some experience in looking after children, because I have a broher and a sister who are under the age of 12 and I know what children of that age are interested in. In my free time I go swimming and I play volleyball, so I think that they will be glad to see what I can do and also learn something new.
I am very talented for art and I won some competitions. I think that I will have a very good relationship with children.
I look forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Katarina

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter 1 by K.Krsmanovic

Dear Jo,

I have received your letter and I’m really happy because I will see you in a few days...What is the weather like in your country? I guess it is very hot at this time of the year.
I’ll be in school and my parents at work, so we can’t come to the airport, but I will ask my brother to come and wait for you there. He has black, short hair and he is as tall as some basketball players.
You’ll bring some presents??? Oh, I like presents very much... For my mother you can buy a book with pictures of Australia (she likes Australia very much), for my father a disc with music or T-shirt with the name of your county. My brother likes rollerblades or equipment for baseball. And at the end, for me you can buy a toy like a kangaroo to remember you and your country, hot Australia...

See you soon,

Katarina

Final T's Correction of Formal Letter 1 by B. Nestorovic

Branko, it would be a good idea to pay special attention to the use of tenses and a proper register.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a client who was in London with your travel company. Actually, my friend and me.
We are not satisfied with the tour.

We arranged for the tickets for one of the best London shows. In your offer you said that it did not matter what it was – whether it was music, ballet, opera or anything else. We wanted to watch ballet but we could only get the tickets for cinema.

Nevertheless, we accepted going to the cinema, but we could not see anything.Our seats were too bad, uncomfortable, and in one of the corners. I do not know London as well as you, but I think that it is the worst cinema in the whole city.

As a result, I will have to ask you for a 30 % refund because you did not give me what you promised and the arrangement was too expensive. I hope we will be able to settle
out of court.

I look forward to your prompt reply.

Yours faithfully,

Branko Nestorovic

Final T's Correction of Formal Letter 1 by P.Milicevic

- Peđa, it seems you did not understand that the job refers to working as a tour guide in your area.
- It would be a good idea to make your sentence structures more diverse by avoiding to start almost each of them with ’I’. You could do this by combining two simpler sentences into a more complex one, for which you can use appropriate linkers and/or participle clauses.


Dear Sir/Madam,

I am interested in the summer jobs that are available in your agency. I would like to have the job, because I have the skills necessary for that kind of jobs and I am interested in meeting people from abroad.

I have worked in the tourist agency ’Balkanik’ for two years as a tourist guide and have travelled to many countries around the world: Egypt, Greece, India, Tunisia, Japan, USA, and Italy are some of them. My experience include work with all kinds of groups, both with older and younger people.
My English is excellent after learning it for ten years, and I have a Cambridge First Certificate. I also speak German and French.

I would like to travel with groups to Italy, especially Rome, because the city is full of ancient treasures that are very interesting for most of the people.

I would appreciate it very much if you considered my application.

Yours faithfully,

Predrag Milicevic

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter 1 by P.Milicevic

Peđa, the rubric states that you have received a letter from your pen friend, not ’heard’ about his situation from somebody.
- Styding at colle eis started after secondary school.
- You should avoid lifting of phrases from the rubric, e.g. ’plan your time better’.
There are quite a few rubric items thay you missed to cover: asking for more information (whether ’so much to do’ refers to his work or social life , if he has problems with eating or sleeping). You also missed to suggest that he he should try to move somewhere else and try to find a holiday job. Encouraging your friend not to give up, possibly by stating benefits of getting a diploma, is a very important item, too.

Dear George,

I have read that you had some problems with this school year in college.Well, it is not so easy as the previous schools. Now you have to study more than in secondary school.The teachers are very strict, so you have to be very careful in classes.
The first thing you have to respect is the teachers. They like students who pay attention in classes, and it’s also better for you because you will understand everything in class and you won’t have to learn a lot at home. I also suggest you should talk with teachers, because they like to be consulted. If your house is full and you don’t have a place to study you can use the school library. It’s always silent and the best place to study.You also have to organise your activities more efficiently.When you come from school, you should start with learning at the moment you enter your room.You would finish earlier and you would have most of the day to rest.
So, that would be all for now and I wish you all the best for the next school year.

Yours,
Pedja

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter 1 by P.Milicevic

Peđa, the rubric states that you have received a letter from your pen friend, not ’heard’ about his situation from somebody.
- Styding at colle eis started after secondary school.
- You should avoid lifting of phrases from the rubric, e.g. ’plan your time better’.
There are quite a few rubric items thay you missed to cover: asking for more information (whether ’so much to do’ refers to his work or social life , if he has problems with eating or sleeping). You also missed to suggest that he he should try to move somewhere else and try to find a holiday job. Encouraging your friend not to give up, possibly by stating benefits of getting a diploma, is a very important item, too.

Dear George,

I have read that you had some problems with this school year in college.Well, it is not so easy as the previous schools. Now you have to study more than in secondary school.The teachers are very strict, so you have to be very careful in classes.
The first thing you have to respect is the teachers. They like students who pay attention in classes, and it’s also better for you because you will understand everything in class and you won’t have to learn a lot at home. I also suggest you should talk with teachers, because they like to be consulted. If your house is full and you don’t have a place to study you can use the school library. It’s always silent and the best place to study.You also have to organise your activities more efficiently.When you come from school, you should start with learning at the moment you enter your room.You would finish earlier and you would have most of the day to rest.
So, that would be all for now and I wish you all the best for the next school year.

Yours,
Pedja

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter 1 by D.Ristovski

Danilo, you must paragraph your writing.

Dear Jo,

I’m delighted that you’re coming to visit us. It’s taken a long time since I was in your beautiful country. I can imagine how hot it is down there - perfect weather for swimming and sunbathing in the clean azure sea.

Now, I have some obligations on March 14th, but I think I will have some free time to meet you at the airport. If I don’t come, I’ll tell my friend to meet you at 16.00. He has very long, curly, black hair and he’ll be wearing a blue and white jacket.

And, in the end, something about the presents. I hope this will not be very selfish and unkind from me. You’ll surprise my parents if you give them these presents: for my mom, a T- shirt with an incription printed on it (for example it can be the name of your country or some famous actor from Australia); for my dad some music records (jazz or opera), if it’s not expensive; for my younger brother a kangaroo toy; and for me.. it’s your choice, but if you don’t have an idea - a book of Australia with pictures in colour.

Thank you for everything, and see you soon!

Yours,
Danilo

Final T's Correction of Letter of Application 1 by K.Pavlovic

Kaca, try to give more arguments for your statements or illustrate them with specific examples. For example, when you say that you like st, you should state why you like it. Why would you take your tourists to Kalemegdan, Petrovaradin, etc? Also, you could have organised the main part of the letter in two paragraphs – your interests and experience in one and where you would take your tourists in another. Using more linkers is also recommendable.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am interested in the summer jobs that are available in your agency. I would like to do this because I like meeting new people. Also, I have considerable experience in that kind of work.I have worked in two tourist agencies: Touring and National in my home town as a tourist guide.Three years ago I used to live in Italy and had my own agency there. That means that I know Italian very well. I think I am very proficient at English, which I have been learning for 8 years and I have a Cambridge First Certificate. I would also like to mention that I have worked with older people in many spas in Serbia. Furthermore, I have travelled all around the world. Greece, Spain, Australia, Egypt, Germany, and USA are some of the countries I visited.
If I get this job I will take my group to see interesting historic places such as Kalemegdan fortress in Belgrade from the time of the Turkish rule, which has a breathtaking view of the Sava and Danube rivers. Petrovaradin in Novi Sad is a similar place offering exquisite fish restaurants as well. On the last day of their visit I will show them round Valjevo, and arrange for a barbecue on the river Gradac.

I hope you will consider my application and look forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Pavlovic Katarina

Final T's Correction of Informal Letter 1 by K.Pavlovic

Final T’s Correction of Informal Letter 1 by K.Pavlovic

Kaca, here is the final correction of your work. It would be a good idea to use use some expressions of sympathy in your introduction, such as ’I felt very sorry/ sad // I was moved to tears when I read your letter. Also, avoid lifting of phrases from the rubric, e.g. ’plan your time better’. One important rubric item thay you missed to cover is encouraging your friend not to give up, possibly by stating benefits of getting a diploma.

Dear Dea,

I am not surprised because starting something new is very hard.You didn’t give me enough information about your problems, but I will try to help you.
You wrote me that there are so many things to do and I didn’t understand whether you think of your college or your personal life. You must try to organise your activities more efficiently. What do you think about making a to-do list for each day? Also, it is very important to pay attention to/in classes. It is very good because you don’t have to study too much at home and teachers like quiet students.You should discuss studying problems with your teachers.Then they will see that you are interested in classes and subjects. If you can’t study in the house I suggest you should go to the library. It is the best place for studying.You said that you don’t have money.Why don’t you find a holiday job? It’s not so hard and you’ll get enough money to spend on yourself.
Write me soon. I wish you all the best.

Yours,
Katarina