1st T's Correction of Story by S.Radovanovic

Stefan, you have exceeded the word limit by 100 words. Use paragraphing to organise your ideas in a better way. Your climax seems to be a little bit unusual. Was the explosive device set to go off at a certain time? Why would it be before the end of work time?

Stranger than Fiction

That day John was working in the second shift because he was too tired after yesterday’s meeting. While he was preparing to go to work the phone rang. He picked it up and answered: ”Hello!” There was no answer. His wife asked who was that and he said that it was probably mistake, so he went to his factory.
John was working in the factory, which produces cars – a new model. He had a lot of work to do because he had just signed a new deal with “Porsche” manager. He was very nervous that day like something bad was going to happen. Than the phone rang and again, there was no answer. John had more important business to do, so he didn’t pay much attention to the calls.
It was 9:45 pm and John was sitting in his office. The end of his shift was at 11 pm but he wanted to go a little bit earlier, so he went out of the factory. While he was approaching his car he realized he had forgotten his keys and a briefcase, so he got back to the office. He took the briefcase and went down to the exit. While he was closing the exit door he heard a big “boom” at the parking place. His car exploded right in front of his eyes. He was terrified. He didn’t know what to do.
After a quite long time he took a taxi and went home. John explained everything to his wife and they called the police.
This will certainly change his life. When he got into bed that night, he could hardly believe what had happened that night.