Final T's Correction of Letter of Application 1 by K.Pavlovic

Kaca, try to give more arguments for your statements or illustrate them with specific examples. For example, when you say that you like st, you should state why you like it. Why would you take your tourists to Kalemegdan, Petrovaradin, etc? Also, you could have organised the main part of the letter in two paragraphs – your interests and experience in one and where you would take your tourists in another. Using more linkers is also recommendable.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am interested in the summer jobs that are available in your agency. I would like to do this because I like meeting new people. Also, I have considerable experience in that kind of work.I have worked in two tourist agencies: Touring and National in my home town as a tourist guide.Three years ago I used to live in Italy and had my own agency there. That means that I know Italian very well. I think I am very proficient at English, which I have been learning for 8 years and I have a Cambridge First Certificate. I would also like to mention that I have worked with older people in many spas in Serbia. Furthermore, I have travelled all around the world. Greece, Spain, Australia, Egypt, Germany, and USA are some of the countries I visited.
If I get this job I will take my group to see interesting historic places such as Kalemegdan fortress in Belgrade from the time of the Turkish rule, which has a breathtaking view of the Sava and Danube rivers. Petrovaradin in Novi Sad is a similar place offering exquisite fish restaurants as well. On the last day of their visit I will show them round Valjevo, and arrange for a barbecue on the river Gradac.

I hope you will consider my application and look forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Pavlovic Katarina