1st T's Correction of Discursive Composition by B.Cuk

Bojana, here are some hints about the composition sections that could be improved. Look for spelling or grammar errors. Also, you have not suggested any specific measures which could be taken to save pandas.

There are many endangered animals in the world,and there are many ways we can help to save them.One of the most endangered animals are pandas.
The pandas live in India and China,but the wild panda populatin is estimated at one thousand.The most critical factor in the fate of pandas is human destruction.They cut down trees,so pandas don’t have enough food.Pandas are usually hunted because of their fur.People sell their fur and earn a lot of money.
Pandas are situated in reserves.Some baby pandas are with their mothers,but some of them are in incubators.Today there are a total of thirty-two panda reserves in Southwestern China.In that reserves is also provided a medical care.
I think that we should do everything to help animals which are in danger.They have lives as we have,so they deserve to live.

Discursive Composition by B.Cuk

There are many endangered animals in the world,and there are many ways we can help to save them.One of the most endangered animals are pandas.
The pandas live in India and China,but the wild panda populatin is estimated at one thousand.The most critical factor in the fate of pandas is human destruction.They cut down trees,so pandas don’t have enough food.Pandas are usually hunted because of their fur.People sell their fur and earn a lot of money.
Pandas are situated in reserves.Some baby pandas are with their mothers,but some of them are in incubators.Today there are a total of thirty-two panda reserves in Southwestern China.In that reserves is also provided a medical care.
I think that we should do everything to help animals which are in danger.They have lives as we have,so they deserve to live.

1st T's Correction of Discursive Composition by K.Vicentijevic

What can be done to save endangered animals?

Thinking about this question should make us worried. You probably ask “Why?”. That is because not many of us think of endangered animals. There certainly are few things that can be done to save those animals. For example, what can be done to save Griffon Valture?
Firstly, the hunters who are killing Griffon Valtures should be arrested because hunting them is forbidden by the law. Once been arrested, they would never do it again.
Secondly, river Tresnica, the place where Griffon Valtures live, should be unspoiled. People are dumping waste materials there, and that can only damage their place for living. If we want to live in healthy area, we must do everything that is in our power to keep the nature unspoiled.
Finally, the man who would feed Griffon Valtures should be hired. They would also check if someone left poisoned food for Griffon Valtures to eat. That person would be paid well for the job that he/she is doing, but also had to be professional. Not everybody can work that kind of job, only lovers of animals.
All in all, I believe that there are people in our country who are capable of doing this kind of job. There are groups of people who are doing what they can to protect Griffon Valtures and nature in whole, but they do not have devices or support of the Government to fight this problem. I hope that we will solve this problem soon.

Final T's Correction of Crime Prevention Report by D.Ristovski

CRIME PREVENTION REPORT

The purpose of this report is to suggest reasons why our area is the main target of criminals.
This area is known as a poor area, with mainly Afro-american population. Statistics say that 93.4% of all inhabitants are Afro, and the rest are Indians. Due to bleak prospects for employment, there are many people who decide to become criminals, like muggers, shoplifters or burglars. They need money for normal life: food, clothes and a place where they can live.
Most of them are from 14 to 25 years old, and from this finding we can see that they are very young people.

I suggest that you should engage organizations or clubs who would educate young delinquents un different ways, such as setting up weekend camps in the province. I think it would help a lot, and there is nothing to lose.

Meanwhile, we need to install alarm systems in shops, big houses, buildings and other important public places. We need more monitoring which is the best way to catch criminals. Also, we must cooperate with the police department and help them in their activities since we know they are not responsible for all unresolved criminal cases.

The crime is on the increase, and we must think about our future and the future of those young people. I am sure that we can do it by following these recommendations.

Discursive Composition by K.Vicentijevic

What can be done to save endangered animals?

Thinking about this question should make us worried. You probably ask “Why?”. That is because not many of us think of endangered animals. There certainly are few things that can be done to save those animals. For example, what can be done to save Griffon Valture?
Firstly, the hunters who are killing Griffon Valtures should be arrested because hunting them is forbidden by the law. Once been arrested, they would never do it again.
Secondly, river Tresnica, the place where Griffon Valtures live, should be unspoiled. People are dumping waste materials there, and that can only damage their place for living. If we want to live in healthy area, we must do everything that is in our power to keep the nature unspoiled.
Finally, the man who would feed Griffon Valtures should be hired. They would also check if someone left poisoned food for Griffon Valtures to eat. That person would be paid well for the job that he/she is doing, but also had to be professional. Not everybody can work that kind of job, only lovers of animals.
All in all, I believe that there are people in our country who are capable of doing this kind of job. There are groups of people who are doing what they can to protect Griffon Valtures and nature in whole, but they do not have devices or support of the Government to fight this problem. I hope that we will solve this problem soon.

Report 1 by D.Ristovski

Dear Sir,
The purpose of this report is to suggest reasons why is our area is the main target for criminals.
This area is known as a poor area, with mainly Afro-american population. Statistics say that 93.4% of all inhabitants are Afro, and rest are Indians. As well as lack of perspective for employment of that, there are many people who decide to become criminals, like muggers, shoplifters, burglars, etc. They need money for normal life: food, drink and a place where can they live.
Most of them are at the age from 14 to 25, and from this information, we can see that they are very young people.
I suggest that you should engage organizations or clubs who would educate young delinquents, such as setting up weekend camps in the province. I think it would help a lot, and there is nothing to lose.
Meanwhile, we need to install alarm systems in shops, big houses, buildings and other important public places. We need more monitoring which is the best way to catch criminals. Also, we must cooperate with the police department and their activities though we know they are not responsible for all unresolved criminal cases.
The crime is on the increase , and we must think about our future and the future of those young people. I am sure that we can do it by following those recommendations.

1st T's Correction of Crime Report by S.Radovanovic

Stefan, it is not clear how the police officers would deter young people at schools from mugging. The verb deter has a negative connotation - it refers to preventing or discouraging someone from doing something by making it difficult for them to do it or by threatening bad results if they do it. Try to be more specific.

To: The Crime Prevention Officer
From: Stefan Radovanovic
Date: 01.11.2005
Subject: Crime in mour town
Dear Sir,

Introduction
The reason of writing this report is to make a clear picture why there is so much crime and finding a solution to make this town crime-proof.

1 Security guards
There is a big problem with shop safety in our town. Shoplifters make out with plenty of stolen things very often and police can’t work out this problem.

Measures: I think there should be employed about 15-20 strong men who would watch over the part of the town where most of shops are situated - something like “shop security”. With this type of job we would solve another problem-unemployment.

2 Deterrent
It turned out that 90% of muggers are students from the secondary school and older. They bring fear into people and that is not good at all.

Measures: Some extra classes should be added in the schools, maybe once a week because problem starts in students. On these classes police officers could talk to students about the mugging problem. Their mission would be to deter young people of committing this kind of crime.

3 CCTV
In the last two months there was an increasing number of house burglaries. More than 15 houses were broken into during that period. People come back from work and see their homes empty.

Measures: I came up with a solution. Using Closed Circuit Television would be much easier to identify burglars. On the other hand, residents should not leave houses unlocked and should install alarms.

Conclusion
There is much crime in our town and that is a big problem. I hope this report will help you preventing it.

Final T's Correction of Report 1 by M. Markovic

Crime in Our Town



Introduction
The purpose of this report is to talk about crime in our town, some reasons for committing it and how we can make the number of crimes smaller.

Reasons for crime
In my opinion, most people who break laws are under the influence of drugs because if they do not have money for them they mug people or even worse – burgle houses. Alcohol is also a big problem. Drunken people can be very violent and can hurt other people, too.

Recommendations
I think that you should position police officers at many locations in town so that our enivornment becomes safer for living. Maybe today not many people have enough money for video cameras, but I think that we can put cameras in bigger shops or in some places where younger people go out in the evening so that they do not use alcohol or drugs.

Conclusion
Although crime is a big problem in our town, I believe we can cope with it and make our life safer by following the recommendations in this report.

S's Correction: Report 1 by M.Markovic

The purpose of this report is to talk about criminal in our town, some reasons for committing it and how we can make the number of crimes smaller. In my opinion, most people who break laws are under the influence of drugs because if they don’t have money for it they can mug or even worst – burgle into houses. Alcohol is also a big problem. Drunken people can be very violent and can hurt other people, too. I think that you should put police officers at many locations in town so that our society becomes safer to live in. Maybe today many people doesn’t have much money for video cameras, but I think that we can put cameras in bigger shops or in some places where younger people go in the evening so that they do not use alcohol or drugs. At the end, I hope you would do something that would help us to live safer.